The Game Feat. LowRider

[Stu]

Just a song about the whole game, 3 different aspects.
Produced By Cyrus Dennis of EnkriptedSoulz.com

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/3/nastystumusic.htm

Drop feedback please.

[RipStyle]

i liked it, nice lyrics
i like the beat and the production ideas
eg: "The Ususal Suspects" & Robert De Niro quotes

nice idea with song
def a good 1
keep it up
both of you

[Stu]

Thanks man, nice props.
Think we could improve it at all?

[Jay2c]

gd shit lads,
ive been looking forward to hearing this after i read the lyrics that stu sent me on msn.
liked the lyrics
liked the audio.
ur both improving loads on audio. ecspecially stu. well done lad.
ya flow was gd, most probs ya best audio i heard from u stuie.
more dope shit from lowrider as i expect nowadays. 8)
the production was quite nice. not really my style to be honest.
but still its safe holmes.
aint really feeling the chorus much but its heard to get a nice hook so dont worry lads

the quality of both peeps was gd.

GD WORK LADS. 8)

[m.S.]

the beat is dope....stu my advice is that you work on your delivery and just presence on the mic...it just lags on after awhile...and people will lose interest. Low you were aight on this...nice lyrics...but NO ONE will take Rakims place....NO ONE !!!

holla for a remix f. m.S.

[Stu]

lol, thanks man, Ill talk to you on AIM/MSN about getting better presense etc.
I would love to do a remix, if we get someone to edit the beat for us.
One

Any more feed?

[KnOwLeDGe]

yo this audio was nice, delivery needs a little work but lyrics were str8, nice flow, the beat was perfect though.........1

[Stu]

Thanks dawg for the props.
Anymore feedback?

[Killa Effect]

yea delivery needs work but lyrics were aight u had shit goin good, try and pernounce words clear u did good on that but just keep working some words i couldnt understand but keep workin on ur rap shit.

[Stu]

lol, I really dont know how i can improve on how I prenounce, isnt it just my accent?
Thanks for the props man.
Anymore feedback?

[D.s.G.]

You both sound like you improved, but there are still things yall 2 lack...

1) Mic Presence - As MS stated, people lose interest if you lack this, ur voice has to keep people tuned...that is why I dont listen to Cormega lol!

2) Flow and Delivery - Yall must ride the beat a lot better, at times, it sound you two were either rushing, saying one word per second or outrapped the beat causing you to wait...

3) Crafting hooks - The hook was kinda stale, and it had the worst flow on the song, I was really confused here....

If yall need me to explain any further or want some advice (on the technical part of rhyming, I dont know shit about editing audios!) yall can hit me up...

D.s.G.

[Stu]

Thanks man, for the breakdown.
I agree with you completely. I just need some advice on mic presence man.
Hit me up.
One

[m.S.]

an easy way to improve...is to learn your rhymes...memorize them...flow them over and over in your head...so that you cna just zone out and flow...u dont have to read ur rhymes, etc....and to stuart...your accent isnt the only thing...you seem like you dont WANT to rhyme...thats what it is sounding like...your just like yea...

[Stu]

Ohh, okay man. Thanks for the advice.
I know what you mean man (after asking you, lol)
Thanks a lot, Ill work on it, will come better next time.
One

[Cap G]

hahahhah ahahah yur voices are funny

[Stu]

Accent man.

[Cap G]

i KNOW

[legos]

Do you rap because you want to or have you?.. Your lyrics and flow seem forced as fuck -5olos

[Stu]

I do it because I want to.
Nothing is forced son, comes natural.
One

[Eagle Eye]

sry fellas im not feelin, I keep my crits honest, nasty stu man u need to drop that US style and ya whole inabition to sound how u really sound, flow is ok, lyrics sub standard.... lowrider you sound robotic in ya flow, and you havent got any emotion this... i just cant feel this, its monotone and sounds very amatuer fellas and im not putting you down but you got some way to go, ive been doing this for two years and i got some way to go, im not gonna bullshit you with dickriding like many others have. pz

[LowRider]

Props to all.

[B-mac]

Aight Listining Right now.. Intro is nice.. The Beat comes in nice.. Flow is aight kinda off at points but yah keep it together.. The Vocals are a little too loud need to me lowered a little Bit.. But its cool.. The Lyrics are Tight.. Quality is good also.. Good Drop Homie.. Keep it comming!!

[Stu]

Thanks man for the detailed feedback.
Appreciated. More coming....

[Lexx]

Okay, first min-- stu your mic is defy too loud--

You start off nice-- but you need to break it up-- change up style, emphasize specific words-- etc... otherwise, you stop paying attention..

Low -
Ha, Your kinda quiet, but i dont know if thats just compared to stu---
The beat overpowers you-- flow is alright--

I dont like the beat-- its boring, and the track drags on-- the intro was good, but thats it.


Yeah, defy play around with style and different vocal levels within your own range not even talking about mixing...

Not bad tho

Keep on.