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Sir.Mercenary
17-02-2005, 10:14 PM
http://hip-hopkings.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=1429

love spells lover. it's more than just a letter
somebody to hold, shed tears yet make it better
i try to be the man for you since i been in love
been down that path but aint no thug give the stars above
so ladies hold ur head up and dun cry no more
coz one day, ur prince charmin will come thru that door
ur infatuated wit the situation askin urself all these questions
frustrated that ur man left you, uncapable he gave u attention
well i gotta solution to the conclusion, refuse to let go of the constribution
composed of your features, i can't stand no admirer's oppositions
speak when the air holds in, in the truth that holds eyes
it doesnt matter, u done ur purpose breathin thru a friend's lies
do u know what i'm after, the agony of age grips thru my skull
nuthin wit values or power can overcome a man's structure
hurt it feels as if the pain never relieves to deal with
constant pressure, heavy burden as i act as i fit in it
the world is torment but my will to live is sucha strong case
havin' memories of better days but right now i'm in the wrong place
god if ur even listenin', watchin over me? as my life passes by
i'm troublesome becoz i'm gonna need a savour to forgive all my lies
forget you, i'm sinful and i'm diggin my own dirt
what makes you worse, youre a curse with absolutely no worth
it's perfectly clear and i'm constantly curious about love
the wounds inflicted still i perserve, out weightin' my soul
so take me in your arms, let me be loved...
and speak to me now, clever no lie holdin me close


i don't write to please anyone so if u got sum bad comments they're all welcome.....maybe i can get sum feedback here..peace ya'll

Stu
17-02-2005, 10:40 PM
BTW you dont need no feedback link anymore.
Nice poem man, some nice lines and rhymes there.
Good rap/poem I thought.
Im feeling it man a lot.
One

Sir.Mercenary
18-02-2005, 05:52 AM
thanks man...

uppin

Vocabulous
24-02-2005, 08:06 PM
Yea im feelin this poem....Im feelin the concept behind this...Nice wordplay and vocab it helped provided some vivid imagery that helped the poem flow...Goodshit