Death Is Certain

[Stu]

Death is inevitable, you cant escape it/
So I live my life, and never hate it/
Like I’ve previously stated/
I don’t believe in heaven or hell/
Reincarnation or people being able to foretell/
The future and what lies ahead for Earth/
I back my beliefs up, so here’ my explanation verse/
The only immortal prospect of you, is your name/
Make it remember through ideas or constructive fame/
Make the world never the same again/
Always play life as a game/
And don’t be to serious/
Spread the truth to the youth without being mysterious/
Connect to them so they understand and remember/
Don’t commit murder and foolishly dismember/
The corpse and end your freedom/
I educate by means of preaching/
Then releasing positive message unlike Hitler/
I speak the truth and never bullshit ya/
Imma skull ripper with mind boggling lyrics/
Dropping complex knowledge you think im rhyming in cryptic’s/
I do this to try and live the life that I wanna live/
I aim to live good and support a wife and kid/
Never flutter an eyelid/
To what I forbid/
Guns, drugs and being all fake/
But I wait for our big break/
To a higher power/
Dropping records like a meteor shower/
So devour what im spitting till the end curtain/
Listen, don’t be in denial, because death is certain

Feedback?
Killer this song is for you man.

[Teflon John..]

Again your vocabulary and rhyming are straight but the structure is blah...other then that it's pretty straight..flow fell off at points...but its still straight..peace

[Killa Effect]

nice drop man u had a nice flow, and vocab could use some multies but other then that i liked it id give it a 6/10

thanks for the dedication

[LowRider]

Not your best work man, but still its nice on the vocab and rhyming level.
Not as many multis either as usual but its still all good.
An improvement could be to make your bars similar lengths, because many people have commented on the structure been the weakest part of your rhymes. They might find it easier to flow with and read if you keep the bars the same length...

Some nice lines..

I don’t believe in heaven or hell/
Reincarnation or people being able to foretell/
The future and what lies ahead for Earth/
I back my beliefs up, so here’ my explanation verse/
The only immortal prospect of you, is your name/
Make it remember through ideas or constructive fame/

That was the highlight of the drop no doubt.

Keep writing man and improving.

Flow - 6.5/10
Strucutre 6.5/10
Vocab - 7.5/10
Complexity - 7/10
Rhyming - 7.5/10

Overall - 7/10

[D.s.G.]

Honestly, that joint was average...I was kind of disappointed really...I applaud the honesty in your lyrics and your willingness to spread a message but the rhyme itself seemed outdated (like you wrote it a year or two ago), I don't know if you put forth effort, but you gotta elevate a level, especially if you trying to take this up as a career...

6/10

[Stu]

nice drop man u had a nice flow, and vocab could use some multies but other then that i liked it id give it a 6/10

thanks for the dedication

It werent no dedication man, its for our collab if your still up for it?
Thanks for the honesty guys again.
What do you mean by the structure?
Ill be editing this before audio though.
Thanks
Anymore feedback?

One

[BOFH1971]

excellent
however from what I can see, you're a little afraid to abbreviate.
its hard to read to a beat, as there are too many syllables in some lines

leave out short words here and there, your point will still get across

shorten long words that can be too, cut off letters i.e. dont say the whole word every so often

Hope this helps
Keep it up

actually I just went through to find a quick example (EDIT)
the line :
Reincarnation or people being able to fortell

just cut out the 'being' and the flow improves

[Stu]

Thanks Bo for the props and advice.
Ill work on it for you, be ready next time!!!
One

[Marshal]

dope man...can't be watered down..Probably your best drop.Period.

[Wannabe]

Death Is Certain, ain't that like royce's quote ?

[Stu]

Probably, and?
What you think of the drop?

[Cap G]

THis was ok but you could have worked on the multis and metaphors but other than that this was hot

[Stu]

Cheers, son. I know this aint my best, more coming....

Thanks

[Glock9]

This thing was crazy man the topic was a bit played but the flow was kewl and the multis were ok this was hot man