If I

[Malicious Intent]

If I …

If I had the chance to make it to the top
I would snatch it, go on and never ever stop
Looking over the horizon for a glimmer of hope
Struggling with life now in ten years how will I cope

If I had the willpower I would go on with belief
Go on forward with myself and never have to retreat
Wave a magic wand and make the world increasingly better
Take out the bad aspects and put them in a shredder

If I had the vision I would instantly find my trail
Looking along the line, trying to find where I will prevail
I could leave now and go to a better place
A place where there are very little problems to face

If I wanted to go now it would be the easy way out
But I will continue to carry on there is not a doubt
However I will write and continue to fight
And make it through this hard battle that we call life.

[DNA]

Nice man...good flow all the way through...u could still elevate on vocab but this was a good drop...

[Decguin]

*sighs* dude.. this is more of a keystyle or prewritten verse not a poem.. not trying to offend but yeah wheres the poetry? it doesnt even have a poetic feel to it.. its bound to a rhyme scheme and structure with no deep poetic tendacy to it.. its a decent thought keystyle but its not a poem.. if you turned this into a school teacher or professor hed laugh at you.. :\

[Stu]

I agree, this is a song, not a poem.
But regardless, it werent a bad drop.
Keep writing, and drop poems here.
One

[Low-D]

nah i like it man .. but i feel its missing somethin, ? i dunno what ... ?

[Shifty]

not dissin just giving you what i think would work, the endings a lil weak. Just cause its so overused. Otherwise pretty good.

[Malicious Intent]

yo cheers it was sumthing i just wrote one day

[Da Alpha Male]

pretty fuckin ILL..good shit Ez-T