no betta

[D-Chronic]

when i spit for yall it's a fortunate event//1

i'm comin strong wit nasty lyrics you can't get wit//2

in O-City wit the TSR just settin off//3

when i get on the mic i blow the roof off//4

how high am i rated you'll neva guess//5

one word that describes me is spectacular yes//6

or you can call me da best//7

say i'm your favorite//8

everyone in da dets is so happy i made it//9

when first comin out all you can do is boast//10

wanna talk about doe i hold the most//11

man yall cats is toast when yall battle me//12

it's DNG also known as D-G the 13//13

13 lines are finished i'm goin fa the next//14

and yall say that D is better than all the rest//15

see D lay it down wit hardcore finesse//16

yall battle me i finish up hollin next//17

[LowRider]

AIght i couple of things man, firstly you need to post a link to show you have given feedback on anohter open mic drop.

Secondly this is too basic for a text drop. On the mic it would sound hot no doubt, but with text you gotta be more complex, get some multis and wordplay and metaphors in. To improve the quality of the drop. Your flow was hot and so was the rhyming, but your vocab could have been twice as better, this is more of a freestyle than an open mic drop....

[Stu]

Need to post a link in the thread. Send me a PM when you are ready to do this.
Until then...

~Closed~