Bored

[wReCkLeSs321]

You might drop somethin hot, I'll call it a piece of garbage/
break a baseball bat and take whichever piece looks hardest/
throw it full speed at your head and put you to sleep in a heartbeat/
motherfucker, ill punch you in the face and watch you go back like carseats/
I'm armed with a knife, and now trouble is about to hurt you/
I'll slice you in two and use you in a doublemint commercial/
I'm subtle with personals, but open with death threats/
People are scared of me that I haven't even met yet/
But I bet that, any cat walks in ready for a fistfight/
I got a quick knife, with bite, that'll slice your wrist right/
This night will be over before you can even go to sleep/
Cause your dyin, and every line I'm sayin makes you slow to speak

[LowRider]

Thats quite cool man, just step the complexity up a little, you had some good multis in there already, the only aspects you could step up is the quality of your punches, and get some wordplay in there. Try rappin about alternate stuff rather than killing people. One1

[wReCkLeSs321]

Ight, thanks man.

[Tha Arkitekt]

was aight not nuffin to get hyped about but it was koo~1~*ark*

[Stu]

Im feeling this man, good looking.
Nice rhymes and all. Cant wait to see you in Open Mic.
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