just a straight drop nothing special

[J-D]

hook:

Im demandin respect thats all i really want/
from the people who dont believe/
my enemies show me love/
all i want is a chance to show you who i am/
but when your just a face in the crowd/
nobody knows ya name/

And they dont want me to blow up/
there scared of what i do/
i got this pressure on my back/
and ive got nothing left to lose/
this is all that im good at all i need is respect/
but thats a big fucking door thats locked out me to success

Verse1

Whos the person here to blame? for me to point my finger at/
why aint i shot up to fame? wheres my fuckin story at?/
of the way that i came up, my pictures on the posters/
not the ones that i made up at home sittin and posing/
wheres the respect that i deserve from the industry comglomerates?/
the people who sed they loved me who i dont have a problem with/
did YOU forget who i am? did you get disconnected?/
all you people out there who really loved my record/
theres so many fucking questions i feel i have to say/
its been going on 4 years and still nobody knows my name/
It feels like a fucking joke sometimes it seems im fucking cheated/
but im never leaving even if im defeated or beaten/

hook:

Im demandin respect thats all i really want/
from the people who dont believe/
my enemies show me love/
all i want is a chance to show you who i am/
but when your just a face in the crowd/
nobody knows ya name/

And they dont want me to blow up/
there scared of what i do/
i got this pressure on my back/
and ive got nothing left to lose/
this is all that im good at all i need is respect/
but thats a big fucking door thats locked out me to success

verse 2

Picture me on a bill board or a magazine front page/
people quoting all my lines when im rhyming up on stage/
the fact that im not there it gets me in a rage/
i feel like im caged hazed going mental for 6 days/
i should be just locked up the key frown away/
coz nobody out there can here or do as i say/
i aint sure any more about going on tour/
i aint got any fans, i'l have to rap to the floor/
cant you see why i need all the respect i can get/
im frowing all i can at this for all yall to catch/
its like im feeding you shit and you choose to consume/
but when you swallow it up thats wen u just wanna spew/

hook:

Im demandin respect thats all i really want/
from the people who dont believe/
my enemies show me love/
all i want is a chance to show you who i am/
but when your just a face in the crowd/
nobody knows ya name/

And they dont want me to blow up/
there scared of what i do/
i got this pressure on my back/
and ive got nothing left to lose/
this is all that im good at all i need is respect/
but thats a big fucking door thats locked out me to success

Verse 3

And so the rap game has changed huh? its not about fame huh?
well i aint known yet so i guess i fucked up the chain (son)/
Coz wen i look frew the box im not on MTV channels
or even the channel U see that i just cant handle/
wen i see all these cheaply made fucking rap songs/
it makes me wanna step back and frow a few raps on em/
coz i no that they wont come back coz the fact they just cant rap/
you'll see me on crack before you see me on that crap/
im too influenced by music to be slowed down and steadied/
so wen im holding a mic all ya'll kids better get ready/
someone frow me a life line coz i know i can prove it/
i'll never take it for granted, destroy it or abuse it

hook:

Im demandin respect thats all i really want/
from the people who dont believe/
my enemies show me love/
all i want is a chance to show you who i am/
but when your just a face in the crowd/
nobody knows ya name/

And they dont want me to blow up/
there scared of what i do/
i got this pressure on my back/
and ive got nothing left to lose/
this is all that im good at all i need is respect/
but thats a big fucking door thats locked out me to success


Like i sed nothing special just a staright key style song

[LowRider]

You need a feedback link, PM me or Stu or Kruwl when you have one.
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[Kruwl aKa Isodope]

http://hip-hopkings.com/forum/viewtopic.php?p=4489#4489

thats his link

[J-D]

thnx feedback any body?

[LowRider]

This would be sick in audio man, the main points are the flow and rhyming, vocab wasnt too great but its a complete song which is cool. Hook is simple but its good, which is the way it should be.

Flow - 7.5/10
Vocab - 7/10
RHyming - 7.5/10
Structure - 7.5/10

Overall - 7.5/10

[J-D]

fanx man i made it for audio

[Stu]

You need to step up vocab and rhyming man.
Other than that it was good, would be good audio.
One

[J-D]

thnx for the feed back stu although i dnt think it needed the vocab to be honest sometimes simplicity can work as a good effect as well i dont see much wrong with the rhyming!

[ThE CunT-FaCEd KiLLah]

too much vocab will ruin it, people dont get impressed by a word in a rhymes that'll score u over 20points in scrabble. U name me 1 artists who uses vocab as their delievery? Usually vocab will complicate it to and you wont be rhymin in time with the beat and shit. Keepin shit simple is the best option, but its cool to use the odd touch of advanced vocab.

V. nice drop tho, keep um cummin, yo!

pz

[Jay2c]

i disagree there, using bigger vocab and rhyming it successfully is better then rhyming easier words.

but anyway

nice drop, would be better on audio. flow and rhyming was best parts and maybe u need to up on the vocab a bit. 8)

[J-D]

we should have a discussion forum or summit for this sorta shit but anyways fanx for feedback! yes vocab is very good and i agree if you can use it to your advantage very well done! i concentrate on flow and rhyming! throw in wordplay wen i can! but without the rhythm to get the track moving you aint got shit! which is wat this song has!

appreciated ya'll

[ThE LyRiCaL PrOpHiT]

yo im likin this man keep doin yo thing im likin this