New MC... tell me wot u fink

[Mc Doza Alongside Mc Vipa]

yo listen ere ma name is mc vipa
killin off dis site like a one shot snipa
one shot Bang and its GAME OVA :twisted:
shout out 2 ma main ma MC doza

Brand new MC straight from da streets
i got da lyrics if u got da beats
ppl are pussys who turn 2 weapons
jus like dere mom wen she beggs for seconds

if ya got da vibes and its in ya heart
hiphop kings is da place 2 start
anyway im jus tryin dis out
if ya like wrote den give me a shout!

(Written by MC Vipa) :!:

[Mc Doza Alongside Mc Vipa]

mc doza comin at ya wiv mc vipa
ul neva no when he's behind ya
watching u on every corner
through da scope of his dirty sniper
im in da tree's im on da roof
you'll neva no if im tellin da truth
time will come and u will see
that wen ur gone u belong 2 me
im the devil and now its spring
mc doza is now crowned king

(Written By MC Doza) :!:

[LowRider]

Same as your other drop mayne, you got the basics covered.
Check the link i gave you for some help.

[Stu]

You have to expand on your lines man, and intergrat multis, and complex rhyming man.
One

[Mc Doza Alongside Mc Vipa]

This is just a few ideas....

Yo da name is mc vipa im like a drug dat makes ya mind go hypa
im around every corna watchin you through da scope on ma snipa
my lyrics are sharp like a snake bite, you mite aswell say gdnite when ya face turns white
no need to put up a fight i cud go on all nite but at da end of da day im always rite

Big up 2 ma main man mc doza goin on like a one man soldier,Now lets get serious playtime is ova!
Dis is war and u jus started da battle, dese lyrics will blow you from da uk straight to seattle
Wana be gangsters tryin 2 make some heavy shit, tryin 2 make it become a No1 hit
Step up da game, go deep in ya mind n go insane, at da end of da day well all in da same game

(Written By MC Vipa) :!:

[Tha Arkitekt]

not gud enough take it from me i use to be in ur position where i was a newb couldnt rhyme couldnt flow but not im where i need to be at just stick to it and work on vocab read a dictionary if u have to or read alot of books imporves ya use of words and plus ur words need to be a lil more complex and make sence u have potential all u gotta do is use it one~THA ARK*

[LowRider]

Theres an improvement no doubt, just keep workin man.

[Mc Doza Alongside Mc Vipa]

yo safe for da feedback (MC Vipa) 8)

jus one question man how u get dem sik graffix?

Fanx!...MC Vipa

[Mc Doza Alongside Mc Vipa]

I took all ya feeback n went away n come up wiv a few more ideas
Yo da name is mc vipa im like a drug dat makes ya mind go hypa
im around every corna watchin you through da scope on ma snipa
my lyrics are sharp like a snake bite, you mite aswell say gdnite when ya face turns white
No need to put up a fight i cud go on all nite, but at da end of da day im always rite

Big up 2 ma main man mc doza goin on like a one man soldier
Rasin da mic 2 his mouth with one heavy blast, broadcasting his lyrics north east west and south
This is not a war its just a contest, one on one wiv me and ya'll see whos lyrically blessed
Step up da game, go deep in ya mind n go insane, at da end of da day well all in da same game
Dese lyrics are like a hurricane inside ya brain, like a drug dat makes ya go insane

Like a dose poison in ya veins, givin ya one heavy concussion
Me n MC Doza are like achemical reaction and dese lyrics are big combustion

Written By MC Vipa

[LowRider]

Thats better, your lines are longer and you packing more rhymes into your lines.
Just your vocab now, rap about different things rather than MC Vipa and the rest. Pick a topic maybe, and do a freestye about it.
One1

[Stu]

Thats better, your lines are longer and you packing more rhymes into your lines.
Just your vocab now, rap about different things rather than MC Vipa and the rest. Pick a topic maybe, and do a freestye about it.
One1

Agreed.
You need topics and concepts.

[Mc Doza Alongside Mc Vipa]

YO safe for dat, i will come bk soon n hopefully u will like wot i come up wiv in da mean time fanx 4 da feed back

Can i ask a favour can u make me n ma m8 one of dem sik graffix plz safe

MC Vipa

[Stu]

We dont make graphics sorry.

[vicemc]

Exactly, you got the basics down, now experiment with word play and creativity...but no doubt you will elevate for sure, just keep at it...good drop

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