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wReCkLeSs321
11-01-2005, 02:39 AM
I'm a lunatic, inspiring more ways for maniacal reactions/
While compiling reactions from crowds like my style mixed/
with a pile of water and potassium/
Explosions, corrupt and chaotic for listeners/
Words melodic with a little touch of being sinister/
Grippin on grenades of verb bombs and metaphoric napalms/
I stock arms in my willingness to think/
I don't panic, my mind stays on calm in between blinks/
Think of this, a mind racin at a pace of lightning bolts/
While your eyes is closed for a split second/
i spit records that are flames like fire stoves/

LowRider
11-01-2005, 09:45 AM
Pretty cool man, you got some nice vocab in there. The rhyming wasnt great, which was the major downfall of the drop. Try and stick some multis in as well bro.
Keep writing mayne.

Stu
11-01-2005, 06:59 PM
Not bad man, you excel in certain areas but slip in others, just find the balance..
Also get the flow right.
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