Dunk`em fast [need feedback]

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When we underss and stay stressed like`em vocal~acrods
I`m not the most~voted but gonna get the best~playa~awards
I`m stab~and~kill the competition with the internal~flow
I`m the nomber one star playa and as~a~star I~will~glow

I alley~up the competition with my dunk~fast~technnique
My flow is incredible,dribble and gonna sneak in like~a~stick
I`m the sneakyest~sneak and i`ll performe like~a~freak
Cuz in rap we still ball and don`t fall as "the ROC`s" Memphis~Bleek
Dribble down the lane with basketball in~ma~vanes
With my dawgz ba ma side and the glock in their~brains
Full clip sure~points like Lil` Flip smokin`~joints~and~sustain
Underss the cheer~lidders and climb~ladders 2 treat`em~like~dames
Be close 2 witness the wireless dunk of magnitude~funk
In the stores we enter 2 rob`em and drink~all~of~their~crunk
I`m so drunk and I see black and white OH it`s me I`m the scunk
I`m the tank~in~the~bank stayn` sensible like a Lucifer`s~monk

HOOK..
When we underss and stay stressed like`em vocal~acrods
I`m not the most~voted but gonna get the best~playa~awards
I`m stab~and~kill the competition with the internal~flow
I`m the nomber one star playa and as~a~star I~will~glow

now please continue ma freestyle...gimme sum feedback.....

[vicemc]

good drop dawg, some words were off, but the flow was there along with the creativity...holla

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[Stu]

Hey it was okay, nothing special, one of your better ones.
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